Obviously-Deranged
April 3, 2013, 10:36 p.m.
Collision: Prologue
E - Words: 442 - Last Updated: Apr 03, 2013 Story: Closed - Chapters: 15/? - Created: May 29, 2012 - Updated: Apr 03, 2013 929 0 7 0 0
Author's Notes: Ok, so this is kind of like a prologue and it's pretty short.I've rated this as M, but that's kind of an overall thing I think, not entirely sure. I will, however, make sure to let you know if there is anything in particular to note in terms of that.I would really appreciate any feedback that you can give me :)I hope you enjoy it.
Kurt slammed his foot against the break causing the car to scream to a halt. It did not stop suddenly enough and soon the boy that raced in front of him fell to the ground after colliding with the hood of Kurt’s car. Kurt screamed to himself and flung himself out of the car to check on the boy’s condition. He lay splayed out against the bitumen, his skin badly grazed in multiple placed along his body, his right arm twisted at such an odd angle that could only mean it was broken, a small pool of blood forming from the stream that flowed out of his nose. He groaned to himself, trying to pull his legs and force himself to stand. He was unsuccessful.
Kurt’s hand was pressed against his mouth so tightly in an effort to stifle the pained noises that were pouring out of them against his will.
“I’m so sorry. Oh my God, I’m so sorry” Kurt breathed “are you alright?”
He placed his hand gently on the boy’s shoulder and turned his face from the ground. “Can you tell me your name?”
The boy blinked his eyes open and whispered, barely audibly “B-Blaine”
With his fingers shaking he pressed the buttons on the phone with a newfound careful precision. “He-Hello? I, um, yes, yes I can hold” Kurt said to the voice on the other end of the line.
“Sorry about that. 9-1-1. What’s your emergency?”
“Um, yes, I was driving and I... He just ran in front of me and now he’s hurt and-“
“Sir, please calm down. Where are you?”
“Near the corner of 7th avenue and west 19th street”
“Ok. I have sent an ambulance and they will be arriving shortly. Now, sir, I need you to try to concentrate. Try to keep him stimulated, ask him questions, get him to squeeze your hand, he might have quite a serious concussion and so it’s best to try and keep him awake. Are you ok, sir?”
“I’m ok. Yes, I’m fine. Thank you.”
This young man was smaller than most, he had dark, curly hair that fell into his eyes and tanned skin that made his hazel eyes seem that much warmer. Kurt took his hand (his own ivory skin further emphasizing the other’s warm skin tone) and squeezed it.
“Don’t worry, it’s going to be alright. I’m going to take care of you” Kurt whispered and Blaine squeezed his hand in return, mumbling something that sounded like ‘Thank you’.
End Notes: So yeah, leave comments please.I'll try to update every 4 days or so, we'll see how we go!
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Excited for this n.n love it!! I hope for lots of fluffiness :3
Aw, thank you. I hope to deliver :)
This story's really cute (aside from the bone-crushing car accident, obviously!) ... can't wait to read more :)
Haha, other than that...Thank you, hope you enjoy it!
No no, I very much so welcome constructive criticism :) I'm going to try to go in order, I hope it makes sense: I get that it's confusing, but that's sort of the point. I don't like to dawdle, and you'll probably find a lot of this confusing...Yeah, they are. I just decided not to have a huge bustle because I only wanted this to be really short and about only them.It's not very realistic as you will find from the rest of the story, but good point.And ok, I don't live in the States, but I have been put on hold here for a moment, and it was only like a few seconds, I'm sorry if it seems longer to you.Thank you very much :) and thanks for the cookie.
I think that starting at the moment of impact was a little much. I was kind of confused; I think it would have been good to have a bit before where Kurt is just driving along, tra la la, you know? Like, where's he going, is he kind lf distracted or something? He probably didn't go for a drive just to hit Blaine. :PBecause starting at the "holy fucksnkefjnkanojan!!!!!!!!" moment was actually kind of confusing.Also, they're in NY, a huge, bustling city. Are there no other people who witness this?And I doubt Kurt (anyone) would have noticed how pretty Blaine was when they were freaking out so much.911 put him on hold? On hold? Nooooooo, that doesn't happen. 911 does not put people on hold on a normal day.I'm being rather harsh. Sorreh, have a virtual cookie? I really did like it, though! Improvement, and all that jazz:)
oh wow...when i read the summary i thought the collision was probably between 2 cars - needless to say i was surprised when kurt hit blaine with his car!